It needs a good edit/proofread Way too many cliches, both in terms of language and in terms of plot Very short, I know it's part of a trilogy but it just plain feels incomplete Feels like a first draft that has been published way before its time Punctuation and grammar are both rather hit and miss Overall the storyline is incredibly disjointed - nothing fits together right, and I kept clicking back to see where I'd missed something only to find out it wasn't there to be missed
HOWEVER... and it is a pretty big however:
There are some great/interesting ideas in here. I've read Shimmerspell and Limerick, and while I'm not tempted to purchase the 3rd part of the trilogy unless I see it for free (I got these two when they were on offer) there's enough here that I can't help thinking there is a good book here trying really hard to get out. I found a lot of the teen-speak to be very realistic and often funny. This book isn't even near ready to be let out into the world at large, but I do very much feel that Spencer should keep on writing, improve her craft, and will then be able to rejig this at some point into a really engaging YA paranormal romance. It's far from perfect, but there's definitely a lot of potential here.