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Good story , but does need checking for typos and punctuation !
on 3 December 2012
Having been to Cardiff lots with work, its always interesting to read about places you have visited and the story is a fast paced grisly thriller, just the sort I enjoy. The descriptions of the area around Cardiff and the background details of the characters were really interesting. Really enjoyed the story and the characters developing but honestly don't think I will be reading any more in the series as it seems like nobody proof read it, and it is quite distracting. Often I had to read sentences a couple of times to get the sense of them as they were so long, with no commas, and poor use of paragraphs, as well as some basic spelling mistakes.
Please Wonny - get someone to read it through, use more punctuation and paragraphs,and I will be delighted to carry on following the adventures of DCI Phelps and DC Pryor!