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There's a good book somewhere inside here
on 8 March 2014
Although I've only given this book three stars it's not because it's poor, just lacking in that certain something to make it stand out. Naively written and repetitive: if I read 'whiskey eyes' once more it'll be too soon. The POV changes at times making the story falter, and there are moments when the author intrudes into the story.
I think it would benefit from killing off a couple of sisters, as when they are all together and with their partners and children, the dialogue becomes messy and the story is unnecessarily complicated by too many people in one page. At one point, even the author gets confused with all of the sisters in a situation giving one of them the wrong name.
Nathan, is a thoroughly unlikeable character, far too flawed and with no redeeming features, and Stella (in my opinion) would never have put up with his nonsense so early on in the relationship, so their coupling became unbelievable. She comes across as a strong woman but spends far too much of the book crying.
The final third of the book is littered with errors and needs to be cleaned up, and a few of those cliches need ditching too.
This said the final chapter is well written and conveys emotion in a expert way. I think with some cuts and a rewrite to remove repetition of phrases this could be a very good book.