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BADLY needs edited and proof read, a frustrating and irritating read, marginally saved by a decent storyline....
on 12 July 2014
BADLY in need of the services of a good proof reader. In fact, my 7 year old could probably pick up on the many MANY mistakes in the spelling and grammar in this novel. Admittedly I am only just over halfway through, and although the story itself has been enough to keep me picking it up again, I am appalled at the basic school-boy errors evident in this narrative. For instance, 'passed' where it should be 'past', and the dreaded 'should of' instead of 'should have'. This is something that is just unacceptable in an author who should have at least a basic grasp of English - in fact at some points I wondered if this was someone writing a novel with English as a second language, because the sentences are clunky, and poorly constructed many times. Sometimes a sentence even needs to be read twice in order for it to make sense, and there are multiple times when the same word is used several times in one short phrase.
It just makes for a confusing and frustrating read.
I agree with the other reviews that said this author had swallowed a thesaurus - why settle on one word when twenty will do?
Sometimes, simpler IS better Mr Whittington!
Actually, it's a shame because the story is decent (so far) and I want to read on but I am becoming irritated at the mistakes evident throughout.
Mr Whittington PLEASE hire a good proof reader to edit your next offering.