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on 23 August 2014
If a writer is going to write in first person there needs to be a reason for it. Why is this character talking directly to us? Are they writing a journal? Telling their story to someone? Yet here there was no explanation in the sample I read.
It seems to be an increasingly common thing, where people write novels in first person, basically because it's easier. You can repeat yourself, use incorrect English, use an easy range of vocab (in this case for a 16 year old), and you can get away with not much editing and not much skill, because what you're writing is supposed to be a kind of stream of consciousness.
Secondly, the whole idea of the rain covering most of the land is nonsense. There isn't enough water on Earth. If it did rain only in certain continents then that water could form huge inland lakes, but would eventually overflow and join the ocean. America would always have plenty of land remaining. And if there is more water being evaporated and constantly forming clouds then it could be argued that there would even be an overall fall in sea level. The scenario which is the basis for this story is very poorly thought through.