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on 17 April 2014
I struggled to figure out the target audience for this book as I'm sure it's meant for an adult reader but in my opinion is really a young adult book as the writing isn't quite sophisticated enough for the adult market. This said it's an engaging story that flows well.
There's a handful of errors that need ironing out, often sentences with words missing and some punctuation issues. I did find the overuse of the word 'loomed' annoying and the use of 'span' which is a measurement of distance instead of 'spun'. But the word that annoyed the heck out of me was the none-word 'gotten' which does not exist in English language usage, the past participle of get is got, the use of this often American English word is popping up far too often with new writers. I'm surprised the author's writing group didn't point this out to him as he credits them with help and advice.
I liked the characterisation within the book and the author's ability to keep the dialogue fresh and the thread of the story intact, however I did think chapter one was a non entity as it gave us information that was not relevant to the actual story and set up a different story that went nowhere.
I did feel let down by the last chapter as the story seemed to end abruptly, it was almost one of those, 'he woke up and it was all a dream' endings.
On the whole I did like this book, but marked it down from four stars to three for the use of the word 'gotten'.