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There should be a minus star option!
on 5 September 2013
Reading this book from start to finish was a true test of endurance, `so fond' as I am of romantic novels. The characters lacked any kind of depth or realism - or even grown-up quality, regardless of their age - and the prose, although so simplistically descriptive as to be reminiscent of a schoolgirl's composition (he did this, she said that), didn't describe as such where it was necessary: e.g. the meals Rosie cooks are always delicious, but not a single dish is actually described or mentioned by name, it's all just food that is beautiful, fabulous, delicious. Likewise, not a single one of the dozens of songs that Katherine sings and records is mentioned by its title.
The real howlers, both in grammar and spelling ("... she HAD WENT back to Tennessee...", "I think you'll GET ALONG GOOD with my father...", "... that the man could TALK SOFT for any reason", "... the man could GET A LITTLE BRASS and pushy" , "Daniel heard her open the DOOR WALL...", "... he MESSAGED her gently...", "Her body SHUTTERED...", "The sign that BARED her name..." and "I can mend UP", to give just a random selection) are very difficult to ignore, as is the increasingly irritating over-use of first names in the countless exchanges (reminiscent of Horatio's habit in CSI Miami).
Literally... this is quoted as it is written:
"Francesco, this is so elegantly wrapped."
" Rosie, I have something else for you! "
"Francesco, I don't understand."
" Rosie, that's our itinerary for Paris."
Then there are the superfluous "of" instances (inside of, outside of) and the total lack of imagination in the use of adjectives and detail; "... he didn't know what she liked so he ordered many things..." [dishes/selection of food, in case you were wondering], "... many papers will be signed...", "the beautiful man", "the gorgeous man", "the cute man" - and I lost track of the annoying repetitions of `he wrapped his arms around' all and sundry.
In fact, the language was so childish ("... with her hair all messed up...", "It will cost an enormous amount of dollars...", "After many hours had passed...") that even before I got halfway through the story, I began wondering whether this was in fact written by a teenage girl rather than a grown woman. That is, until I got to the one sex scene which I found rather disquietingly graphic within the naïve context of the entire `oeuvre'.
And what's with this American obsession with butlers? (Who, by the way, in these stories not only behave, but are also treated in, an extremely un-butler-ish manner.) What's wrong with calling the man in question `my personal assistant' or even `right hand man'?
In conclusion, reading this e-book involved a lot of teeth-gritting and eye-rolling on my part, and I'm just relieved it was a free download at the time. I'm most taken aback to find this is the first book in a series, and I will give any other novels by this author a very wide berth indeed.