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Super Mary Sue, the invincible hero conquers all again.
on 23 April 2015
Reasonably well written, though it would be nice if the editor had paid proper attention to the spelling and grammar, there isn't too much of it, but it does seem that the editor did their job half asleep judging by the silly mistakes they missed.
The whole 'one of those Longknifes' thing remains as stupid as ever, since the author does very little to substantiate the opinions he then ascribes to the majority of people. Her living family basically consists of 2 still living war heroes, an ex politician businessman and a popular politician (he keeps wining re-election), there are no black sheep in the family and no justification for the family apparently being seen as so untrustworthy.
The backstory of her maid is just so stupid. It's already got old in this book, but don't worry it continues for a few more yet. Basically, is she trustworthy? Don't know, but we don't have time to sit down and find out. Everyone repeatedly skips plans to get to the bottom of this mystery even as she is obviously hiding things. Also, if you find the cutesy 'mama Abby' way the maid refers to herself to be condescending drivel, rejoice, it continues for quite some time and doesn't get any better. In fact, nothing about the maid's character gets less irritating, ridiculous or stupid.
The Mary Sue nature of Kris continues, and remains as stupid as ever. She beats everyone and completes every mission successfully, even when she makes mistakes she comes out on top, and she never has to be saved by anyone else. Her companions are there to advise her against doing things that they know much more about but she does anyway and wins, every time. It got old in the first book, it's even older now,