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Actually, four-and-a-half stars
on 27 January 2015
Love the story, Henry. Five stars for that. I agree with the Literary Review - `Plausible, scary and exciting.' I had been looking for a long time for an espionage/ terrorism book involving current world powers and here I found it - U.S.A., Arab and Israeli Intelligence services all represented. (And the Brits!). Nowhere is the story straightforward - there are constant twists and layers which I enjoy. A couple of the coincidences look slightly contrived and the end looks a little too tidy but I can forgive you a lot for the rattling good story you jproduced.
You successfully gave your American characters American vocabulary and manner (though I have my doubts as to whether American authors would return the compliment with their British characters). However their style seems to have leaked into the rest of the narrative: e.g.
- you have various top-notch British civil servants and knights using American dating e.g. `May fourteen. September eleven' rather than the European form
- vocabulary such as obligated, fender, elevator have crept in. The British forms are obliged, bumper and lift..
Other irritants include
- peculiar selective treatment of acronyms ( Why COBRA, but Nato?),
- your character who flies from Frankfurt over fields of Kent and Surrey (when I fly that route I come in over Essex. That surely wouldn't be difficult to research).
- your Chief of SIS designate doesn't know the difference between `fewer' and `less' and, more relevantly, when to use them.
- you got the conditional tense correct once but incorrect every other time (that almost falls into the eccentric category!)
- while most of your English is sophisticated and differentiated there is a scattering peculiar phrases like `blinded windows` (the windows have been made blind?) `dawn rising' (it is the sun that rises) and `the Karlsbad' as in `... she had gone to the Karlsbad ...'. Why `the'? Nobody says `... she had gone to the Liverpool ...'
I look forward to giving you five stars at some stage in the future.