Top critical review
Potetialy Good, Poor Grammer and Production
on 5 June 2013
First let me say that I am an adult and avid fantasy reader, so do often turn to books for the younger person to fulfill my needs. About the book first I feel that it has the makings of a potenially good story but fails. There is no indication of the targetted reading age so I assume it must be teens. For this story to be for this age group it is very lacking in substance as it is very simplistic. I therfore consider it to be for the pre-teen market, for this the pace and content is good. I would expect the story to have continued further than it does,if printed in a more commen smaller type face and without the padding of additional space between lines the whole story as printed could have occupied about one third of the pages (i.e. very short) My biggest problems with the book is that it gammatically poor with tenses being mixed,and incorrect sentence structure. Both of these distract from the reading enjoyment even for a pre-teen book. Here the Editor should have done thir job and had it corrected. The proof reader has done a sloppy job also as there are repeated words and even a complete paragraph repeated at one point. I have purchased the first three books at once from Amazon and wish I had not, as the second Sun Mage appears to have the same problems as this, and my partner who has now read all three agrees with me, as even the third book is also of as low standard and also still fails to complete the story. Is this writer just publishing short extractions as books to increase thier profits I ask myself? It certainly would seem so. Finally do you bye it not for me it expensive for what you get.