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on 27 March 2014
Despite an interesting world and promising plot starting point, I found this book rather flat.
There were three main problems. The first is a basic plot failing. The heroine was simply too powerful. She had more psychic abilities than an octopus has arms, and kept producing new ones or variants on old ones whenever the plot got stuck.
The second problem was that the plot was utterly driven by psychic revelations. It felt like cheating, and left no room for our trusty heroine to show her canny heroic qualities. She just followed the psychic breadcrumb trail, which was kind of boring for me.
Problem 3 is that the writing style was... Sparse. Economical. I would have liked less factual 'we ate pizza, curled up watching a film then went to bed' descriptions, and more of the kind of detail that brings me immersion, empathy and identification. A few less statements of what someone did, and a lot more subtle scene setting.
I mean, what does the inside of an elf's house look like? What does a shifter think about working in the agency? Why were the vampire loose ends such obvious red herrings? All things that might have created a deeper, more satisfying book.