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The White Hairs is an unusual short story by Noah K. Mullette-Gillman.,
This review is from: The White Hairs (Kindle Edition)
Storyline: Noah blends some interesting concepts for this story: astral projection, the existence or non-existence of the eternal soul and the acceptance of your fate.
Farshoul is a White Hair - a humanoid creature - that lives high in the mountains with his people. They're a world apart from man and yet so closely related. The White Hairs view humans with a sort of dismissive contempt for their lack of "sight" and appreciation for the world around them.
Like many of his tribe, Farshoul has the ability to travel outside of his body and see the world via astral projection. But, his experiences are completely different than that of his fellow White Hairs and he isn't entirely sure that he likes it. It changes him and he must fight to get back what he lost.
Grammar/Spelling: The book had no grammatical issues to speak of and zero spelling errors. My suggestion would be to combine some of the shorter sentences as there are sections that seem rather choppy and do not flow as well as other passages. I noticed a couple of formatting issues that will be easily corrected after another read through.
Character Development: The story follows Farshoul and his adventures with soul traveling, but I didn't feel as if I got to know Farshoul very well. His experiences were pretty life-altering, but I can only assume that as there is really very little development of his character. Noah created a potentially very interesting character/creature but fell short in explaining his outlook and thoughts prior to his initial soul traveling incident. Perhaps flushing Farshoul's character out a bit more would help the reader truly understand the exceptional differences in Farshoul's personality before and after his excursions in the astral planes.
Writing Style: The writing style was simple and lacked any technical aspects. The story was a little vague at times when it could have explored the White Hairs' past and their interactions with the humans and their revere for the Giants. The ending was also quite confusing as the Giants who were evil at one point in the story were not evil at the conclusion of the book.
Continuity: No issues with continuity.
Overall Rating: 4
I have to be honest and say that I don't believe that this is a book that I would have chosen on my own to read. I want to be fair and say that as this was not exactly my cup of tea, I am basing my rating purely on formatting, grammar and spelling. It might be better if it were geared toward young adult readers.
For myself, I was a little uncomfortable with the idea of the soul not being eternal. Not that I'm particularly religious, but I like to think of myself as sort of spiritual. Not in the hemp skirt and dreadlocks kind of way, but in a more casual, "Hey, yeah... I have soul. It's pretty cool and lasts forever..." This is simply because these beliefs help me sleep at night.
The White Hairs by Noah K. Mullette-Gillman is an interesting concept and great for people who are interested in astral projection, the question of the eternal soul and different spiritual planes. There are some scenes of mild violence, but no adult language or situations.