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2.0 out of 5 stars The Magdalene Conspiracy, 11 Dec. 2012
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It's a shame how badly written this novel is really. It has so much potential, however is ruined by the lack of proof reading and far too much unnecessary detail.

For instance the author alternates between using correct Roman numerals for the popes (eg. XII) and incorrect ways of writing it (X11). It wouldn't bother me so much if it wasn't that it was alternating between styles, even within the same paragraph. I also didn't like how one of the main characters alternates between being called "E" and "Edoardos", both in speech (which could be explained by nicknames) but also in the prose, which doesn't make sense, again without any consistency. The repetition of unnecessary information throughout the book, such as why Pope Callixtus chose that name, makes for incredibly dull reading, and all this makes it seem like this is a draft version of the book rather than something that should actually have been published.

The large lumps of historical background information (at least two chapters on the history of Venice) are much better written compared to the rest of the novel, which almost makes me wonder if they were written for something else - something that had been proof read.

The story does have potential, which is why the book gets two stars, however it clearly hasn't been proof read, and needs a lot of work before it would make for pleasant reading.
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