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Steampunk Detective Desperately Seeks Editor,
This review is from: The Affinity Bridge (Paperback)
This was an interesting concept, spoiled by some sloppy writing and poor plotting.
If an author is trying to create an alternative world, I think that it is important to make sure the details are credible to maintain the illusion.
So, for example, we asked to believe that Miss Hobbes, who is described as having a, "dainty but full figure," (whatever that means), can break down a door and then drag an unconscious, fully grown man onto a bed. Later Miss Hobbes is distracted by a shouted warning, having managed to ignore Newbury crashing through a locked door to reach her (doors get smashed open fairly frequently, building standards are pretty poor in this alternative world).
Then there is use of language. For example we are told (twice) that Mrs Bradshaw has a Scottish accent, but at one point she says, "...I ain't about to try and find out." No Scot would say "ain't." Write idiomatically if you must, but at least choose the correct idiom. Similarly most of the time the characters speak over formally, but occasionally anachronistic (in its proper sense) language slips in, such as "are you okay".
Worst of all, any fan of Dr Who can work out the mystery pretty quickly, and the resolution is not due to Newbury's less than outstanding powers of deduction but to his ability to fight off various assailants.
After a while I was only reading this (I was trapped on a train) to spot its mistakes and infelicities. All in all, this was a poor effort designed to cash in on the popularity of this genre. Although Miss Hobbes is eminently fanciable (she has pearly white thighs and can put you to bed when you are comatose, what more could you want?), I won't be following her further adventures.