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3.0 out of 5 stars Short Story with Small Teeth, 24 Aug. 2011
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I picked this up out of interest after stumbling across a debate on the Amazon forums. It is, indeed, a short story concerning an ill-fated fishing trip and a creature from the deep. Positives include a nice brisk pace and easy, flowing narrative that raises a smile or two for the right reasons. Negatives include an ending that appears rushed and the overall piece is sorely in need of an edit.

So, then, three stars because two denotes under the Amazon rating system that I didn't like it. I did like it so it gets three. It is a serviceable tale with small teeth. With dedicated revision and editing its bite may become a lot sharper.
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Initial post: 25 Aug 2011 19:01:13 BDT
DMS says:
Dave,

Glad you liked the story, I shall work hard to re-edit the story and revise the ending. I hope that I will be able to make it better and use the experience for my next work!

In reply to an earlier post on 27 Aug 2011 00:41:20 BDT
Dave Jeffery says:
Hi DMS ...

You're welcome. My only advice is not to fall foul of poor marketing examples you may find on Amazon. Interact with readers, don't be tempted to dupe them. It will only hurt your work and, worse, your reputation as a writer.

Good luck with what you do. You have my respect.

Dave
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