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Far too long for such a flimsy story,
This review is from: Freedom (Paperback)
The late academic and writer Sir Malcolm Bradbury once said that 'It is the sign of bad writing that it is always enlarging itself into significance through rhetoric' and this is the biggest problem with Frantzen's story. The family at the heart of the book are merely mouth pieces to articulate the writers own opinions about over population, conservation and right wing politics. None of the exchanges seem very authentic, I don't know many teenagers who would have such deep feelings about these issues, Frantzen contrives situations and manueovres his characters into places where he can vent his spleen. Because of this the writing comes across as self indulgent and hard to engage with because all you hear is the writer.
I think that Mr Frantzen would have benefited greatly in reading Elmore Leonard's ten rules of writing - he seems to abandon most of these tenets with wilful abandonment, I guess when you're a published author you can do pretty much as you please. Another problem is the superfluous characters that make an already bloated plot unnecesarily longer, the editor needed to be more brutal and slashed at least two hundred pages from this book, It would probably have improved it, it just seems to ramble on tediously for page after page.By the time I got to the section titled Enough Already, I was whole heartedly agreeing. The one positive aspect is that it is encouraging for aspiring writers that such a book can find a publisher, because that means there's hope for everyone.