Top critical review
on 28 March 2012
Let me say first of all that I am enjoying this book. Nearly a third of the way in, I have no idea where this is going - which is just as it should be in a tale such as this. The basic premise is not original (person wakes up lacking memory of who they are or what their circumstances may be), but that matters not at all; it is the journey towards understanding that is important, and that is shaping up well.
But oh dear, oh dear!! The writing needs serious editing as it is scattered with irritating beginners' errors. The flow jumps and slows poorly. The POV (Point of View) is all over the place, adjectives and adverbs are thrown around willy-nilly, and the same words/phrases are repeated over and over. I could go on and on. Does any of that matter? Well, yes it does, because it jolts the reader out of the story world and back to reality.
Find a good professional editor Mr Cairns, take his/her advice, and you could have a five star book on your hands!