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OK but lacking something.
on 8 November 2015
I liked this enough to finish it, but was so annoyed with Kale's decision at the end I nearly threw my Kindle across the room. This story of a young dragon indifferent to the world around him, forced into human form with some of his dragon abilities modified along with it, is interesting reading but awfully juvenile. The characters come across as just that - characters in a story. For some reason they don't breathe life. Neelan the young female elf was particularly annoying, selfish, controlling, jealous and acting like she owned Kale who she barely knew! Kale falling in love with her was totally unbelievable. As someone else said, the Americanisms get really irritating, especially that word 'atop'. it is so overused it should be banned! Don't they get taught alternatives at school? There are so many options they could use just for this word alone! I couldn't quite see why the author referred to Neelan's eyes as 'glassy' at one point. She was not staring or tearful, so in this instance it seemed insulting. The grammar was off too, for example 'had not awoke' instead of 'awoken'. Then there is the dryad Elanya. She speaks in shalts, thees and thous, then at one point says 'musn't' which is a mismatch. There was also a modern phrase or two put in the tale - something I think not English - 'prep her morale with positive reinforcement' ! This was totally out of phase with the rest of the text! I also resented mice being referred to as vermin. As an animal himself, Kale would surely not have thought this way.
The book is very cheap so I should not complain too much, but I felt it lacked a certain maturity in the writing style, as can be seen from the examples I have listed. If you want a light read before bed or on the bus, this is OK. But it is far from the best fantasy I have read.