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Work in progress...........
on 20 March 2012
Whilst I did finish this, it was a bit of a chore and would find it difficult to recommend this to others.
The main reason I think (for me) is it reads as though written perhaps by a young person or teenager (as others have mentioned) not just because of the grammar and spelling, but for many reasons besides, such as the continual use of over descriptive words or perhaps I should say mis-use and mis-placed use of over descriptive words. There are also nonsensical statement aplenty, with one I remember being "he never once broke eye contact with the two men".......eh? he must have done when he looked from the first man to the second man and vice versa and another scene where a zombie is standing on it's feet having a tug o' war with tethers held by multiple captors, but it then states that upon closer inspection its broken femur is sticking out of its thigh.
Another hint at this being a young author was the juvenile way the the characters put themselves into silly and unbelievable situations, mostly in order for the author to kill them off for a shock (which wasn't a shock, because they were unbelievable situation and therefore the deaths became expected).
Difficult to give examples without spoiling it, but in one scenario it states, the group doesn't have a 4x4 (why....?? just steal one parked up or from a dealer) and then can't find any gas/petrol (why.....?? just steal some from stationary cars...... one's a veteran marine or some such for goodness sake) so they pull into a gas/petrol station (why...?? no electric to pump it) and because they are 'exhausted'.... (why...?? they weren't ALL driving)they fail to check for zombies.......eh...??? something they have been doing as routine for months, however instead of getting back in their cars they decide to run 20mins to some apartments and instead of trying to find one unlocked, they noisily kick the door to one in......eh....?? Ah.... then it all starts to make sense because it's setting the reader up for another clumsy ham fisted 'shock'......meh.
The characters were flat and uninteresting and despite the writers attempts to flesh them out only a couple stood out slightly (Craig and Julia perhaps...??) and because of this it made the jumping around within the different story threads difficult to follow if you didn't read it regularly as I found I had forgotten who, what, where and when and cared even less when they died.
The lack of research was poor (granted it's a zombie story but it involves a real world relative to the reader) and it grated in places because it wouldn't have been difficult to check some of the facts and some parts of the dialogue read so clunky that I started skimming the odd paragraph.
I give it 2 stars as I have read (sorry..... I mean given up on) some truly abysmal zombie/apocalyptic fiction on the Kindle recently (Undead Nation:Outbreak and Zombie Syndrome:A Space Horror spring to mind) and although I skimmed paragraphs here and there I did manage to finish this, albeit reading it in small sections but don't feel the author should be penalised to one star along with the aforementioned.
Hopefully any future work from this author will improve with time (and perhaps an editor....???)
Suggest you try this ONLY if you have already done the better end of the zombie stuff, such as Rise Again or Walking Dead - Rise Of The Governor...etc and ONLY if it's as cheap as chips, but can't claim it to be anything other than mediocre if not just a bit amateur.