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Slightly let down by serialization
on 27 December 2014
I am massively conflicted by this.
I loved the novel concept behind this story and a lot of the execution was done well, but...
I can't help feeling that this was actually let down by being a Kindle Serial Novel. This is the first of it's kind that I've read, and unfortunately, it's not made me inclined to try another one. I got this novel as a complete download, not serialized, so I don't know if this is an issue with the serialization, or with how the author chose to treat it, but the repetition in each chapter was just distracting. We do not need to be reintroduced to the characters every time, nor does the concept of the Index need to be repeated with each new case. Even if there was a significant time lapse between chapter publication (I do not know and I don't want to malign unfairly) the reader is not going to have a) that bad a memory or b) the inability to go back and reread previous chapters before embarking upon the latest.
Here's a confession - I used to read fanfiction. Sometimes, due to the authors' other commitments (usually school) there would be anything up to six weeks between chapter uploads. That didn't mean that a complete recap of the characters/plot was necessary when they finally decided to update - the story just continued where they had left off. So I'm confused as to why an established author found it necessary to do what amateur fanfic writers already know puts off a reader?
Having said that - it got better. Once the main story got going (around Chapter 4) where there was a recap it was done mostly as an expansion of the character, rather than the same details rehashed (there were still some elements of this, but often done as a character explaining to a new character in story, so easier to swallow).
As I mentioned at the beginning, the main idea of the story is at the same time a twist on an original concept and, where this has been done before, a further twist on the revised concept, and the fact that I was intrigued by this treatment kept me reading beyond the rather weak first three chapters to the meaty main story which I did finally enjoy.
Three stars - it was okay, but the repetition in the chapters could have been edited better.