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Initial post: 16 Dec 2012 17:48:31 GMT
Ace says:
Help me please! I'm trapped in the box. She heard Footsteps.

Posted on 17 Dec 2012 10:46:12 GMT
Last edited by the author on 17 Dec 2012 10:46:47 GMT
Sombrio says:
She heard the click of a switch and light suddenly flooded in. With a shiver of terror she suddenly realised that what she had thought was a box,... was in fact, a giant vagina with teeth.

CRUNCH !!!

. . . . . . . .THE END . . . . . .

Posted on 17 Dec 2012 12:25:21 GMT
carocaro says:
She awoke from her nightmare, despite the perversity of that hideous tooth filled vagina, she realised all was not well.
The bed she felt had disappeared...it was cold, stone. The smell she had was chemical, sweet and cloying, her head and thoughts muzzy, the noise she heard metallic, attached to her wrists, arms pulled up high, her clothing torn in tatters across her chest revealing her rounded breasts...her vision, black, so many shades of black!
Heart pounding, breath gasping, excitable fluttery feelings in her abdomen, memories and flashbacks came back...she remembered when...

Posted on 17 Dec 2012 21:59:55 GMT
Ace says:
Daddy, Please! She screamed in her mind. It was all coming back. She needed pain and pleasure to forget. She hears Bobby's Footsteps. She gave him instructions, instructions he must obey. He's just a puppet. She close her hers to determine reality. She counts his footsteps; soon his hands will violate her body, her soft white skin. Her pores open to suck in oxygen in the room. She is alive! She Said, "Baby, you don't know how much I need this." Bobby said nothing and retracts his footsteps. Every step backwards he took raised the fear inside her. Her heart pounding all she can think of is The Box. Someone took all the toys out of the toy box, the inside was painted black. She called out, "Bobby, daddy I'm not afraid anymore," but she is. A beam of light flickers on, and she see's giant vagina with teeth moving in her direction, she screams, "I need my box. I am a sinner." Her voice echoes through her 2100 sq. ft. house that puts Bobby once again in motion. He's coming and this time he has something in his hand.

Posted on 17 Dec 2012 22:11:17 GMT
carocaro says:
It's long, glistening, there seems many parts as they sway hypnotically to and fro, in the dimness of that dark cell like box she hears a faint swish, swish, swish, getting closer and closer and suddenly,

Posted on 18 Dec 2012 15:44:00 GMT
Hana-Lou says:
She was forced back into reality when she felt a stinging pain on her left cheek while her other cheek was dirty from the cold, hard ground she had been sitting in. She forced herself to sit up and look into the eyes of her abuser

Posted on 18 Dec 2012 19:16:49 GMT
carocaro says:
The eyes seemed almost toad like, so focused and still they seemed to want to pierce her soul, to see not just the fear he wanted to instil, but to sense and savour a hint of underlying excitement too. He swung the black glistening handle, it's tassels close, so close to the exposed skin of her left breast. One of the tassels touched her skin for the briefest moment and a searing pain like a hot needle shot from skin to the end of her nipple despite it being several inches away. In his other hand he held out a dark box shape item, as he turned it around she saw straps, a combination lock, a rippled area which was indistinct in the dark but as he squeezed the back of it it squelched open and white shark teeth were clearly seen against the darker background, triangular at top and bottom with wider serated ones at each side. They all met in the middle. Frozen with hypnotic horror she continued staring at this strange thing and as she stared he squeezed the sides closer together, which forced the teeth to open in a parody of a faceless snarl. 'Curious Princess? Wondering what it is? Where you are?' His voice had depth but something else, a tone that made her flesh crawl, a slimy wet sound to his speech and mouth. The box needs feeding he said, soon it will be fitted to you, an intimate part of you...but first you need to see its purpose. Your choice, your finger tip or your ....

In reply to an earlier post on 20 Dec 2012 18:44:46 GMT
Last edited by the author on 21 Dec 2012 11:04:09 GMT
Sombrio says:
Suddenly there was an incredible explosion, clouds of dust and smoke roiled so thickly around that it was several minutes before our heroine could see that the entire roof and walls of the house were gone and she lay completely exposed to the wind and sky. As she lay there quaking in fear, wildy goggling at the night sky above, a deep, booming voice filled her ears and shook the very floor she lay on. Every syllable this voice uttered was etched indelibly into her mind. Never would she ever be able to forget the advice that unknown being so kindly offered her :

"This is all getting more than a trifle embarassingly,... 'dodgy-sounding'. Perhaps all our sexual fantasies should be best left in the privacy of our own imagination rather than hung out for public viewing on an open website like this. Get a life."

In reply to an earlier post on 20 Dec 2012 20:24:07 GMT
gille liath says:
Harry, mate, this ain't like you (or is it?). What skin is it off your nose?...

Posted on 20 Dec 2012 20:36:54 GMT
Ace says:
Unknown being said, It's not too late to turn back. It's not too late to close The Box forever. Curious Princess said, please don't take me back, Unknown being said, you give me no choice; you must go back, 1,2,3, 4, 5, no! 5,4,3,2,1, please wait I'm not ready for this. It's time you learn the true. Why are you doing this to me because the Unknown being said, you have opened to many boxes. The house is put back in place; Curious Princess is release from her chains, Bobby jumps in his car and put the car in drive and backs out. . 1am, 11pm, 10pm Curious Princess close the fridge doors and walks backwards, sits down and put down the phone, watch T.V. 9pm, Bobby walks backwards to the adult store and everything in the little black box fly's out and he gets his money back and close his wallet. January 2013, December 2012, Bobby you don't listen to me. April 2012 California, Curious Princess, I think I love you, Bobby don't be silly you don't know anything about me to love. March 2012 everything in my fits in a box. 11pm January 2011New York, the ex boyfriend, Get the hell out, I don't want you in my life, get out. She opens the box and says, this has to work, He loves me. Curious Princess to Unknown being, I am not going back. I don't want to see him. 2010 London, 2005 Canada, 1999 somewhere on earth, Father!
"Curious Princess, come here. We're going for a little walk. I need to talk to you about something." said Father. Curious Princess was only ten human years old when they had this now famous conversation. And she didn't see it coming.
"Curious Princess, I love you. I want to talk to you about something I said to you, when you were a 10,000 younger. I made a promise to you. I told you I would always love you. That's a promise I plan to keep. It's the other promise I made to you that I cannot keep. I promised you that our family would always be together. Your mother and I are having problems right now. I know I've told you, when a human, man makes a promise he keeps it. I just don't know how to hold this one. I will always be here for you, don't cry. I did something really bad to your mom, so I can't be with your mom anymore."
"Please don't say that," Curious Princess pleaded. "You told me you would never break your promise to me."
In her human child's mind she concluded that it must have been her fault that her family was falling apart. Maybe if she her human duties this would not happen, cleaned her room more, or didn't talk back as much.
"I'm sorry daddy, what did I do?" She asked. "Don't leave. I love you; I don't want you to go. I promise daddy, I will be good from now on. I promise."
"No baby it's not you. It's me. It's my fault. I opened The Box. I don't know what I was thinking. It's hard being a human. It's hard to love, to trust and to never lie. I fell out of love.
"You don't love mommy anymore, you don't love me anymore." She answered.
"No honey, I do love you. You mean the galaxy to me. It's not your fault. I have learned a human trait. I've done and said something that I shouldn't have, so now daddy needs to go away. I need sometime for myself. I will someday see you; remember to keep the box close."

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 02:20:47 GMT
Huigh says:
I may not have my virginity any more but I still have the box it came in.

In reply to an earlier post on 21 Dec 2012 14:20:50 GMT
Scarlet Lady says:
Was it last Christmas?

In reply to an earlier post on 21 Dec 2012 14:32:56 GMT
Frenchie says:
And last Christmas, I gave you my heart... the very next day..
What happened the very next day? I was still in the grips of alcohol fumes, my mind went all blank. I think I wanted to block the memory of that very next day.
Anyone remembers what happened the very next day? a true horrific tale...

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 14:48:00 GMT
Scarlet Lady says:
Yes, oh yes, I do remember and remember it well French - I never realised that a vacum cleaner hose had so many uses until that Fateful day - I truly believed that Sebastian and Casper were just close friends.

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 15:11:12 GMT
Scarlet Lady says:
You have the patience of a Saint French - After walking in on the pair you still took them to A&E to get the hose removed.

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 16:21:20 GMT
carocaro says:
Which of course was still attached to the box with those awful serrated teeth. Meanwhile at A&E I was looking for some sign of which department they may have taken you...signs like for spares and repair, or transplants only, when what before my very eyes...

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 18:49:29 GMT
Scarlet Lady says:
That damned box with its teeth - if it hadn't bitten into the hose Casper would have been twice the man he is today!

Posted on 21 Dec 2012 18:56:42 GMT
carocaro says:
With an appendage to be proud of instead of a partially bitten dangly bit, but the horror and ecstacy didn't stop there before anyone realised...
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