Top critical review
on 12 June 2013
Actual rating 2.5 stars.
This wasn't a bad book, but it could have been better. My biggest problem was with the writing - the style just didn't flow for me. I didn't really see the point in the time/date/location headings, it just detracted from the story. I also found the very short length between each time change jarring. It didn't flow well.
There were several times in the book when the perspective was messed up - for example, Shane was on the phone talking to Chelsea, and he somehow knew what she was doing in her movements, even though he couldn't see her.
The dialogue was stilted, and it didn't sound natural. People talk with contractions, they won't use 'I am' all the time, they'll say 'I'm' - it didn't sound real and really pulled me out of the story.
I could probably have overlooked that, and the spelling errors/word confusion (mussels/muscles, cubicle/cubical) but the story just wasn't strong enough to stand on its own, and the 'suicide note' of the title felt convoluted (no one would write a resignation letter like that!).
Disappointing as I'd heard good things about this. Ah well, it kept me occupied I suppose...