Some day I really have to start reading other people's reviews and taking them to heart.
I am not a proper english fanatic and probably abuse it a fair bit my self consequently I usually can let a lot slide. Especially in the case of beginning writers but I honestly can not understand how anyone would want to put their name to this stilted eight grade grammar.
Example; the author had the President of the "advanced country" start a nation wide broadcast with the words "Like you all know, humanity..." From there it is all down hill.
It may sound picky but you'd really have to experience the dialog preceding and following that priceless gem to get the full flavor of what the author considers worth publishing.