Pace of the story: 4
Creativity of the content: 3
Completeness of thoughts/rationale: 2
Length: 2, for content and context offered
I think that this short story, even as a short, could have been a little more complex. It seemed far too simple to me, the conclusions that the protagonist drew....yes, way too simple.
I would have preferred to be seduced by the story a little more, rather than just given everything on a platter. The obvious conclusion early on was that the protagonist was going to lose the only thing he had left: his daughter.
It would have been nice to know the man's religion (a lot of references to praying), etc.
That being said, I did enjoy the story, which is the biggest reason it recieved a three!
For a free story, it was a steal of a deal.