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mind you" the author didn't think we are sufficiently intelligent to work this out
on 15 October 2014
This is an example of how not to write and these gems are why:
"Getting r&p'd by a hot guy is a huge turn on for me" WTF????
" He was my daddy, but not my real daddy, mind you" the author didn't think we are sufficiently intelligent to work this out.
"..we both had daddy-son fantasies " I know lots of gay guys use the term 'daddy' and 'boy' but not quite in the writer's context but what do I know?
"spicy citrus scent... called Citron, French for lemon". Do we really need this level of explanation?
"...he would not get married for a while (for homosexual reasons). Surprise!! its supposed to be MM romance
"But, daddy can't you just renounce your title..." I could go on.
The handsome prince meets the pauper incredibly badly told.