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Badly needs some good editing!
on 12 November 2011
I seem to be in a minority here, but I thought this novel was very poor indeed. The basic plot, which takes place in the course of a single night, has the potential to be a good one; a man goes hunting with his nine-year-old daughter and comes across a group of villains who are out for trouble. In another part of the forest (literally) a young man and his girlfriend are in a parked car for a spot of privacy and a cuddle. The two stories become intermingled through a series of mistakes, people are shot, another is kidnapped, and there is the threat of rape and a chase. All exciting stuff.
These ingredients could make for a good, even thrilling, read. My problem is that the plot becomes unnecesarily muddled, and the writing in particular is poor. If there has been any editing at all, it seems to have been minimal, for some good editing would have made for a far better, tighter novel. Over-use of adverbs, over-writing, unncessary detail (for example, telephone conversations which include every "good-bye" and "I love you"; we know this happens in real life, but we don't need it in a novel) spoil the flow of the writing. And then there are unnecessary details, like the police dog who will only take instructions in German. This adds nothing to the plot. The same dog spends most of its time licking its genitals rather than working; would such an animal really be used by the police? Then there is the deputy sherrif, who upon finding a woman bound and gagged, bundles her into his car without taking off the gag or the bonds (thus, of course, failing to find out who she is and what's happened). Would this really happen?
The climax is spoiled because we reach it before the end of the novel, and so the tension relaxes too early, and by the end, I was struggling to finish the book. The short chapters certainly serve to break up the narrative and make the novel more readable, but I did not enjoy this novel at all, and certainly couldn't recommend it.